cityscape

[khangle81]

a recent digital painting from my entertainment class. Its a scene from my storyboard (under the entertainment/sketch section of my site). Please give me a good crit before I spend money printing it out for presentation. Thanks ahead for any comment :)

http://www.khangle.net/Entertainment/P_Arrived.jpg

[StephenC]

wow more new awesome work...

[kaini]

incredible work khang, I love it soo much !!!
I first thought it was an oil painting, :)

Now for the crits:
that black grid at the bottom is quite strange. It doesnt have the right perspective and confuses and distracts the viewer a lot. But I cant find any other crits. good job man !

[Batteram]

Man, where have you been? This work is just too good. You deserve 10 beers on the house.:chug:

By the way, how long did this take you and have you got any more?

[taff]

Wow, Khang. I like the painting th eway it is. Of course, you could refine the apitning even more, but it would probably take away from the current lively and painterly look.

I got a little distracted by the shadows on the building on the right end of the painting. The black spots might be a little strong in contrast, or to fluid in form and shape.

Awesome image. :)

[yolegas]

awesome!!

[nardfrog]

I got your critique right here you bastard! Just KIDDING!haahaha im so funny. Apparently i have no advice for you because its just so damn good. I think most peoples advice would just be oppinion based at this level of work.

Incredable job, post more beauty more often

Much respect

Tyler.

[TJ Verhagen]

Looking great! no wait... thats an understatement..
Exelent? yeah thats what im looking for:D

I love the colors, most sci-fi cityscapes you see are dark and depressing.

Keep up the excelent work!

[jayceel]

I have now seen a few of your paintings and I must say you are an amazing artist. This picture is beautiful. Is it 100% photoshop? Show us more............ :)

JayCeeL

[Tedsuo]

Dude, I would love to live in this city. Great vision!

As far as crits, I notice that you don't have many hard edged brush strokes. Most of the painting is soft, with the exception of the figure in the foreground. But the little girl with the red dress, the double level train, the catwalk... these are all interesting features. Maybe give them each a little fleck of hardness/contrast so my eye has something to rest on when I'm looking at them?

P.S.- I checked your website. Cool stuff! I really like the "Dreamer" painting! One thing though, your images pop up in these non-resizable windows which are all sliiiiightly smaller than the actual images. It's driving me batty! :D

[ChadTHX1138]

Great work! checked out your site i like your rendition of "The GREEN MACHINE" that was my favorite toy as kid it totally kicked the big wheels @$$!

Here's a link to it if anyone doesnt remember it the GREEN MACHINE! (http://www.yesterdayland.com/popopedia/shows/toys/ty1349.php)

[I.was.ink]

awesome piece. did u use painter for that ? whew, excellnt job. the only thing i wanted to point ou is the little ship type thing on the right side flying by. its a little too distracting. I suggest blending it in with th background and maybe making the contrast of the things in the foreground much more contrastier: eat: i know thats not a word but it would help the bridge come out. man thats a really good job. congrats

[vfxart]

Hmmm...
Not sure what you're trying to get a crit of, but here goes.

For painting, I'd like to see a bit tighter rendering up front, I don't mean get all tight and overworked, but the loose style is going to have more of an impact and suggest more depth of field if you play with planar relationships more. So, tighten up a bit of linework and crank a bit more contrast up close.

Second, you said this is from a storyboard, but what am I supposed to be focusing on? Reacting to? I'm guessing the figure walking away in an establishing shot of this environment, but it could be the ship moving right to left, the transport train back there, the parent/child coming towards us... any of these elemtnts could become the focus of the shot in an instant. I know it's difficult to get all of this across sometimes in a single image, but your technical skill is at a level where you can probably start to focus more on these things. Sure, there should be a number of things happening at once, but we need to see and understand exactly what you mean to put on the screen and have happen before us. Tough to do without knowing what's come right before, and what will happen next (and yes, I've specifically avoided heading to your site yet for the answer)

These are concerns that technical skill will free you to face. Bravo for getting to this point!

[Creativefx]

Hi Mr. Khang
Dude, such a large improvement since the last time I saw your work. How are things at Artcenter? Your kick #$@#&.. in a good way. Keep up the great work

-Hong Ly
“Creativefx”

[el coro]

VERRRRYYYY nice!!!!

[prismacolor]

This is very nice work. The depth you get is top-rate; your tonal judgement is excellent. You asked for crit... here's a couple of things I notice in addition to some edge work. Unless the guy in front is very tall your perspective placement is a bit off; IF your viewpoint is eyelevel, and the people are all on the same level...and the road/walk is level, the heads of the people (adults) should all be approximately the same height -- more or less running through the horizon line. Second, I'm not clear on the focal point (same comment as vfxart - above) -- the perspective and "tunnel" point me to the doubledecker bus/train thingy, but that's not terribly compelling to me. If it's the woman and child, then a touch of color there would draw the eye. Even in an establishing shot, there should be someplace interesting we're going, imho..

all in all...damn good work!

[Clodhopper]

love the work, but i got an observation to declare. theres no signs! i don't know if you did that on purpose or what, but thats a cool scenario fer the future; no advertising. what a concept. on the other hand, i think it would be cool to have some signs like on the side of the train/bus. or maybe an illuminated sign around the pillars in the foreground...its just that cities have signs! [i work in a sign shop]

[JoshuaTheJames]

great as always khang!

-Joshua

[amphex]

Wow!
Very creative and imaginative..and amazingly well done!
Great work =D

[khangle81]

thanks for all the comments and great crits. Seriously, they helps me out a lot. I took most of your advices. I'll put un update here soon. They're just minor stuff like the elimination of the foreground grate and a bit more hard edges in the foreground. Anyway, here are the replies to the comments.

Clodhooper - the glowing stuff is suppose to be signs butI was too lazy to think of the graphics. But that is a cool idea to have no advertisings in the future :) that and pollution and things should be peachy!

Prismacolor - right on with the perspective crit but its a bit late for me to make major shape changes. As for the focal point, the "man" and child is the focal point so I guess I have to add a bit of "oomf" to them

CreativeFx - sup Hong :) thanks for dropping by man. I've got you on my link list. You stuff is amazing(ego rubbing!). As for Art Center, the most exciting thing this term is having Ryan Church as a teacher. I've learned so much from him. Too bad he's only teaching this term or else I would take his class again.

vfxart - yep, I should spend more time on center of focus. I'll save that though for my next painting!

iwasink - I used painter 6. I've heard mix crit about that vehicle so I'm still undecided of what to do with it :(

ChadTHX1138 - THE GREEN MACHINE! I have no idea what that was. I guess or hoping its only a coincident but thats cool man. Thats what I'm gonna name it now :)

Tedsuo - I just added a bit more detail on the foreground, I'l post it here again (not much of a difference but its definitely an improvement)

jayceel, TJ Verhagen, nardfrog, yolegas, StephenC - thanks ( I think my head volume just expanded by x=64.323 %, y=94.3223 %, z=37.8 % :)

taff - fixed it!

Batteram - it took about 12 hours but there was a lot of frustration and biting finger time included

kaini - fixed that too!

[Darrell Bowman]

Dam if this is a sketch hate to see your finished art.

Great work.

Sometimes my bosses would ask for a sketch knowing
they pay me 200 bucks then ask me to do it better,
and selling them as final art making 2000.

[Mr.Magnetichead]

Looks like Corresaunt (sp?)

Cool:)

[McNallyism]

Whoo! My mind is tired from spinning in circles. Nice stuff there. Good depth, form, etc. So how long would you estimate you spent on this piece? Probably half an hour, right?...

-Sean

[MindCandyMan]

HOLY COW!!!!!! This is fantastic!!!!! I just went to your website and looked at all your images. I have to say this one and one looking outside of the cockpit in the jungle are my absolute favorites. Your work is top notch man. WOW. So awesome man. Your work is really inspiring...really inspiring. Keep posting and making more art...I can't get enough of it!

[DragonGX]

That is a really awesome painting! I love that style of painting.. its loose, but not too lose.. it really makes it interesting to look at. I cant rally offer much more of a crit since everyone has alreayd said everything I thought of..

One request, can you please post (or email me) a bigger version of it? Im trying to learn painter and id liek to be able to study the painting up a bit closer to help me find my own style...

Anyways great job!

[Ron]

This is great work. I don't have any crits at all. It would be nice to know a little about the story though?

Just wanted to let you know that I've been checking your work out recently and it's very inspiring. I'm planning on going to Art Center hopefully in a year or so, it's cool to see such great concept artists coming from there.

Keep posting!

[Scotty]

It reminds me of that Japanese Anime......METROPOLIS. Very well done!! I am in awe.:)