hawk painting..**coming together now**

[Osmus]

this is eagle wings on hawk head..couldnt find good ref from a hawk. i'd like to know if there are any major mistakes before i continue with it. all comments/crits/insults/ect are appreciated. : )http://img7.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/newhawk1.jpg

[Nixon]

You might want to reconsider the composition and layout of this piece. The edge of the paper cuts off the end of the wings. If this cropping is purposeful, then you might want to exaggerate it a bit more and present the bird in a swooping sort of pose (in-your-face composition).

[Osmus]

thank you very much Nixon, I had an art history teacher named Nixon. lol . Anyway, here's the second draft..tell me what you think/like/hate. http://img7.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/test_hawk2.jpg

[Osmus]

ok i hate how that one looks..so i made a new one and i feel like it's much betterhttp://img7.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/finalhawk2.jpg

[Osmus]

work on it a little bit. again i really appreciate any and all feedback. i feel like i'm shooting in the dark with this painting thing.
http://img7.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/finalhawk3.jpg

[Osmus]

O.K. i'm proud of what its starting to look like. i feel like the egg doesn't fit quality wise as the rest of it. so i will try to rework that..and maybe put a tree in there so the egg doesn't look like it's floating. everyone else feel the same?
http://img7.photobucket.com/albums/v18/osmus/finalcover.jpg

[johanson]

I've got a question for you about the concept. I like the play between image and text. The eagle is breaking through... perhaps into success. But why is the eagle breaking into an egg? Wouldn't that be like a person stomping on a child? There is something disturbing about that. Maybe I'm way off. Just thought I'd share my concerns.

later,

-andrew

[johanson]

I'm glad to see that you've knocked in a background. In the future, you might want to suggest the basic values and forms of your background right from the start. That way you can develop the picture as a whole. It's hard to develop a good value structure in a picture when it's made piece by piece... especially on white paper.

just a thought,

-andrew

[Osmus]

im doing this for my old highschool yearbook cover..they specified an eagle breaking out from an egg, and the slogan " breaking away into success" ( half the people say the hawk is landing, and half the people say it's taking off ) so i left it alone. I did this in photoshop. i made the background and thought it looked nice, so i used it for this cover. thank you for your advice, I will be sure to use it next time!