Dwarven Calvary.

[JerMohler]

This is another tonal piece I've been working on.

Just finished(I think), any thoughts?

C&C more than welcome.

http://www.jeremymohler.com/sketchbook/senatoriumtone.jpg

[legacy]

looks to plain to me. good composition and such, just needs more detail / shading.

[bgermain]

I like the shot.

The arch in the upper left corner looks a bit outta whack with the rest of the perspective. And the window designs look too plain or modern. Maybe you could put a more interesting design in there instead of a grid. You might also add doors at the bottom that (presumably) lead out to a garden or balcony.

[ZeroWave]

I think it looks great. Although I think adding something to the table might break up the monotony...Like a war-room map..or some papers or something..just a thought

[Skank]

good work, ive always liked your work, and i think this is an improvement over your last tonal drawings.
i agree with the above post, you have a figure pointing at something on the table, but its not obvious as to WHAT hes pointing at..throw some maps on there or something =)

keep it up!

[JerMohler]

Thanks everybody for the feedback.

Deadlines suck, that may be why this seems so plain. Poor excuse, but, it's God's honest truth.

You guys make some very valid points, I'm still waiting on reference for the map that goes on the table. As for the windows, I concur, it does need something. I find I have a tendency to over do my detail and I tried to lighten up a bit here in an effort to speed my process, but, I think I'm going to have to put in some more detail when I get a chance.

I really liked the way this image turned out. I'm starting to move in a more complicated direction with the tonal work I'm doing and I'm not entirely sure everything is working (yet).

So, thanks again. Your feedback is helping me out alot. Seems my tones are alright, I just need a bit more detail here and there, and that, I think I can handle!

I'm working on a couple more, I'll post them in this thread as I get them done.

[andru]

To be honest, I'd say its the low tonal range that makes the image seem a little dull, rather than the lack of detail. I'd continue to work on your tones, adding in some much darker tones and some lighter ones.

[JerMohler]

Hey people,

Here's one I just finished up.

I'm running into a problem with these more complicated pieces. In areas that get complex, it's rather hard to decide where and what tone would be best. Whether or not it's a good idea to use multiple tones.

Any thoughts or advice?

C&C more than welcome.

http://www.jeremymohler.com/sketchbook/dwarvencalvarytone.jpg

[legacy]

WOW.
this image has a big improvment from the last.

hrm the only thing i really see in the pic that could use some work would maybe be the foreground grass. its kinda confusing in the front, but the back is perfect.

nice job man.

[Wohr Path]

Both of these peices are nice looking, but I agree that they could use some more variations in the tone. I really like the dwarf and the horse, but in the background the castle looks pretty bland, maybe if it had some shadows under the little roof overhangs, or some texture on the surface in a few areas. Also on the previous peice it seems like the darker floor squares get too dark in the shadow, the contrast between them in the sunlight is very low but then in the shadows it is higher. Maybe to make things more interesting you could add little details, even if it was just some cracks and specks it could improve the overall look.

[DanSTC]

I think they're excellent, solid illustrations and the generic looking quality of them is part of their strength, personally. They could easily fit well into any generic medieval fantasy RPG sourcebook, or a historical reference book for fantasy gamers, or any number of other sources.

[DanielandTheLionsPen]

Your first one is good, I like your clean cut style... I would like to mimic it in my own work personally. I would have loved to see a little more detail and colors would've made the image POP, but they're good.

Your second pic is great.

Color would've really made these wonderful man.

[sjoerd]

Stylizzzzed

verry nice and clean (sometimes a bit to clean, but it isnt a bad thing)

how long do you take to finish one of those pics JerMohler ?

[RCabrales]

JerMohler, my crit with the first drawing is that it seems cut-off, where part of the table (and possibly more characters) have been cropped and the central focus of the picture seems to be an empty corner in the back because my eye can't decide between the banners and the table....

as far as the rider image....i agree that the grass/foreground should be a different shade from the background/castle....i think that would help give the image depth as well as frame the rider better.....also, the horse's legs look stumpy....but maybe that's intentional since it's supposed to be a dwarf cavalry if i'm not mistaken....

otherwise, your presentation is very easy to read and very clean....

-raul

[infinitipo]

these look like they could be part of a comic book, almost..."The Dwarven Cavalry" or somethin;) If they were, then focusing on the empty corner in the first pic would make more sense--it's to make room for all the talking. But either way, I like the angle.