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[Living Rope]

http://livingrope.free.fr/Galeries/galeries%20Web/fire-in-St-John.jpg
Painter+Toshop, Phile hale in head for the color scheme.

[endregan]

phil hale all the way on this man

the blue bg makes it silly.

a darker hue may look awesome

[bfaubion]

man, i really like the wings on this one....and the rest of the costume. i see some anatomy issues that could be cleaned up. the neck area is too thick. there isnt enough mass in the hips area. and the left foot looks square, the smaller toes would look better if they were smaller and went back at an angle on the foot...its almost as if he has 2 big toes. the background is way too saturated. maybe a dull blue greenish sky would look nice with some texture.

[Living Rope]

thx for the quick feedback, men. :chug:
I've fixed that crazy blue screen into something more dull. But I wanna keep it in a strong tone anyway. Some anatomy has been changed too. I know that the open hand seems a bit weird but I simply don't know what to do to fix it.

'hope you like it a little anyway.

[WildSpruceMoose]

THis is awesome. I love the twisted, almost streched pose. The blue toned down looks good. The value contrast around his head compared to the rest of the piece, creates a very powerful focal point. If this was made into a poster I'd put it on my wall. That's saying a lot because I don't like many things on my wall =)

[Happy Camper]

The left side of his stomach/chest seems to bug me, it seems to curve out more compared to the other side, plus it doesn't shape into hips. Other than that awesome pic. I love the facial expression.

[heiesuke]

the left hand holding the scythe bugs me and his extra long torso. i like it tho

[RCabrales]

Living Rope....verry nice...great expression and i really like the texture of his skin and the texture/design of his wings

you mentioned you were unsatisfied with his open hand...
i would suggest you fix the thumb because as it is, it looks too stumpy...

i think the legs need work (especially the feet), the toes seem to be stuck together, and all the same length, you could try stretching the two middle toes out and shortening the smaller two, but even still, this is a terrific picture...

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i have to be honest. i like this the least out of all your work. this is nowhere near what you have done with your past sketches. i've always enjoyed your egon schiele-esqe style you have going. this pieace just doesn't have the same feel as your batman sketches, your crow sketch, chassealours, aureole or even your catwomen. heck, i'd like to have some of those on canvas to hang up in my place.

i'm a phil hale fan myself, and what i first thought when i saw this was double memory. i also think that there are already already enough phil hale wannabes out there and not enough people with their own style like you have. i hope you keep improving on who you are and not try to copy what everyone else already does. i think you're a better artist than that.

but, in the interest of fairness i will give you my critique. first thing, i think his face is a little too cliche with that whole open mouth scream and the scrunched eyes. someone else mentioned the neck already. it is too think at the base of it, but i think what makes it look too thick, is that the jaw is to thin. the jaw should be closer to the thickness of the cheekbones. the head also seems too far to the left. look at the center of his jaw and the center of his collar bones, then compare them to the center of his pectoral muscles.

the collar bone on our right seems too short also. it should extend almost to the outside edge of the pctoral muscles, and the shoulders should start just a fraction below that. his right arm(our left) almost seems dislocated cuz it's so low.

someone mentioned the thumb being a little stumpy and i agree. the joint near the palm should be at the outer edge of his palm. i also think the hand should not be at that drastic of an angle. you really have to "force" your hand to bend at that angle, so it just seems a little bit unnatural. if you straightend out the hand just a little(think about pointing the middle finger to 7'oclock) it would help out your hand issue a lot. i also feel that same wrist is a little too thin.

happy camper mentioned the chest/stomach area... i actually think it's the ribs that bother me most. the ribs on the left have a weird shadow that makes that side look indented. the right side looks much smoother and uniform. the medallion he is wearing should be a different color... it blends in too much with his skin. i would suggest using a similar color to the wings. that would make it stand out.

everyone mentioned the issues of the legs. i don't know enough about the anatomy of the legs to give an indepth critique on it, but there are some issues there.

good points on this... i agree with RCabrales... the wings are great. so is the way you handled the chest area. i like the glow around his head to keep the focal point there. i'm also a fan of your blue background.

it is a good piece, and if i didn't know your work already i'd even say it was a successful piece. i just think you are better than this.

hope the critique was helpful...

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