Failed Rescue part 2: Gabriel's Revenge

[tegehel]

Hi, this is theoretically finished, but I'd like C&C on how to improve it, please.

Part 1 of the piece (http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?s=&postid=149305#post149305)

Thanks,

C.

http://www.tegehel.org/graphics/newfolio/colors/failed_rescue_part_2.jpg

[Skank]

i like this!
very interesting character
the only things i noticed: the outstretched hand holding the knife should be a bit bigger, its the same size as all the others and it makes the arm look short.
also the lack of detail on the left hand (our right) is somhow distracting....its non conformity keeps drawing my eye (if that made any sense lol)

very cool man, the design is very original

[foster]

now this is cooking! the lower right hand is way too bright, brings too much attention to that area. i am not convinced by the motion blur on the hands. you need to work that more into the arms as well. possibly get some reference on motion blurring. there are many ways to express it.

little more work on the upper two arms. the left side, our left, does not foreshorten in space, it just looks short. the right arm's forearm is a little too symmetrical in shape, this makes it appear stiff and lifeless.

the lighting and costume, excellent!. love the background and ground plane. you are kicking butt!

jon

[Living Rope]

Fantabuloustic !!
I'd have the same kind of remarks as Jon concerning the saturated bright lights though. But the idea and the way the hands are expressive make me love this illo a lot.

[brachypelman]

Impressive. Impressive how this piece seems to be living.

[tegehel]

Skank, ne more time, thank you for your ideas. I've made the hand 110% bigger and added a bit of details on the other one. I hope it's better now. (all in subtelty :)

Jon, perfect criticism. I feel ashamed because some of them are so obvious. At least, they become obvious when I read about them. I guess, when you look at a piece for too long, you start to not see things anymore. Anyway, I've fixed everything you said. What do you think?

Living Rope: Thank you sir. I like it even better after the fixes. I hope you do too.

Brachypelman: Thank you very much. I'm still trying to figure out "my style" but I think I might be onto something now...I'll experiment more.

C.

http://www.tegehel.org/graphics/newfolio/colors/failed_rescue_part_2_2.jpg

[chakuseki]

My brain = Dumb.

:flower:

[tegehel]

I don't mind criticism, or even insults, if they are informative or constructive, however I fail to see what your remark brings other than to show your profound ignorance, not ot mention questionable education.

Care to explain your comment?


C.

[Wohr Path]

That concept is really sweet! I was noticing how you can focus on any combo of two arms and get a different looking pose, definitely cool! The whole peice has a nice design and all of the arms have good motion. There is one small thing I see that kinda bothers me, though it really isnt a big deal and maybe its just me but it seems as though his middle left hand is off. (the one reaching for the sword)
It appears as if the hand is too long from the thumb to the end of the index finger, It may just be an optical illusion or something, maybe the angle of the thumb? or the way the hand is a little fatter in the center not sure exactly? It could also be that it needs a little highlight (not as bright as the one you removed earlier but something) Well in any case I thought I would bring it to your attention since you seem like you really want this peice to be perfect. Hope I am of some help, again really cool peice you have here!

Dont mind the rif raf, any one who can display the sum total of their IQ by holding up fingers is not worth wasting the breath.:chug:

[Banimator]

May i suggest adding more of a dialog to the composition? Obviously your character is threatening, but to whom? where is the group who's terrified, running away in terror, or frozen in fear to the ground. Or standing aside in awe.

I love the upper part of the body, but the amazing style in the upper body kinda makes the rest of the image look simple/plain/less. Perhaps frame it more tightly and add a person staring at him from a lower position in total awe?

Just a thought.

[tegehel]

Thank you for your comments. :) I won't upate it right away, because I'm in the middle of moving, but after the move perhaps.

Banimator, maybe the first part will help you "see" what it is attacking. it's more of a revenge trip really...

C.

Part 1 of the piece (http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?s=&postid=149305#post149305)