Men at work

[OLSEN]

THIS WIP IS PUT ON ICE, I DON´T HAVE TIME TO WORK ON IT AT THE MOMENT. THANKS TO ALL WHO REPLIED, SORRY FOR WASTING YOUR TIME.
-OLSEN



Hi all,

i started this here a while ago, it´s a rough composition im going to spend some time on the next few days. It will, if it turns out as good as i want it, be part of my portfolio.

If you have any ideas, comments or whatever, let me know.


heres the rough comp:
http://medlem.spray.se/ksmolsen/image/WorkersWIP.jpg

heres the actual pixels, im working fairly large so theres plenty of room for everything.
http://medlem.spray.se/ksmolsen/image/Pixelface.jpg

Btw, i know the perspective is crappy on the machine in the foreground, so theres no need to mention that right now.

Be cool, post a comment. :)[

[fukifino]

Hmm, I like the lighting and such, but I'm having a hard time figuring out what's going on here. The front figure looks like he's holding a bowl the way his hands are, although what I see is him holding some sort of bar or rod. And the next guy along is welding it...but the first guy is holding it really close to his chest.

The third guy just seems there to fill up space...he's too prominent to be a background character, but not doing anything worthwhile for us to look at.

So yeah, I'm a bit confused. :)

[OLSEN]

the bar/rod he is holding is a heavy cable, the weight makes him hold it palms up. I suppose i have to make it more obvious that it´s a cable, perhaps by attaching it to the foreground machine and genreally making it more cable like.

I dont think theres a problem that he is holding it so close to his chest though, as he is wearing massive protective gear.

The idea is that the third character will be working one the foreground machine aswell, im just not sure what he is supposed to do, but i like him so he is staying.

Thanks for the feedback and keep it coming.

[trevor]

no offence meant but the comp is a little confusing
i read your explaination but its still unclear
if yer actual pixels are that large i think it needs a more defined,
or crisp line between objects and forms, many of the values are too close
to each other.
try looking at it in grayscale or just as a silhouette
yer brushes seem a little soft or too transparent

[OLSEN]

Thanks for the reply Trevor.

It is however only a fast sketch made to get the composition right, and also to get the right lights and colors and the basic idea clear enough for me to understand it. I just wanted some feedback to see if there was something terribly wrong with it. Rendering is unimportant at this stage but thanks anyways. :)

I will post an update in a day or two.

[Idiot Apathy]

Obviously what is going on in the picture is still in your head, probably even still developing.

Man #2 seems to be welding a cable or rod that Man #1 is holding but man #1 seems to be ignoring him and kind of far away from him. If you can or feel like it I say try and make it look more like they are a team and fully aware of each other.

I like Man #3 where he is too, kind of gives the idea that they are a team.

Is the background on fire? Soi maybe they are a rescue team? Or more sinister... setting ablaze the city?

Or is it like a workshop or metalshop? Are they assembling some sort of automobile?

I have faith that in the end it will come out perfect after seeing your work on the DSG.