pax pages

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/1b.jpg

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/2.jpg

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/3.jpg

[S51]

I have absolutely no idea what's going on, but it looks pretty damn cool. :D

[Shadowkiller]

I love it, its a good start for a comic script just need a story behind it

[PriNcE oF SpAcE]

the second last frame and the last frame confuses me, other than that I think I know what's going on.

really like your style and imagery(is that even a word?) especially like the first page...

[Lost Dragon]

Hmm.. Well, I am probably going to be unpopular for saying this, but I'd actually like to see more definition and a cleaner look.

The hairy line stuff works when things are supposed to be freaked out, but.. Not everything is freaked out all the time. For me, that style loses impact after a couple frames.

Just something to consider. This forum is for crits right? ;)

[soul8o8]

..it's a very special style and it takes a while to get used to - but once you're used to it it's just like everything else!

i'm with dragon - contrast is everything! this style has plenty of contrast in relation to other comics and styles - it is simply freaked out! But it has no inner contrast!!! i think this style needs more variation in order to keep one's interest in the long run.. it is too "intrasimilar".. er.. i just made that word up :)


i really like the style though!

[Grendel]

I agree guys it can be more defined more for the reader than my own expressiveness ...I am working on a middleground of expression and visual definition.

this is with text added by the writer.

http://www.ozf5.com/colorpics/pax_1_mockup.jpg

http://www.ozf5.com/colorpics/pax_2_mockup.jpg

[Lume]

love it

though i would do something about the page your images are on,now its wite but it would be nice if it would have some darkish colours to it, i once read a sort of dark gothic kinda version of the batman comics, the drawer worked with pictures to and added them into the background, that was awesome


grtz, lume

[Halis_Aetrous]

Your work has always been superb.

This work you've posted here is like the cherry on top, man. Absolutelyl awesome. Moodalicious.

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/41.jpg

[Lume]

love what you done with the transparency of your image

dont take this as the ultimate way of creating a picture, this is just my very humble opinion which you may reject or accept .


now i think the pinkish mood you got going on could be worked on a little more, maybe more contrast, variations, warm and dark colours( but do not let this dominate your pictures which are on top ) : the question also is ; does the pink represents the mood you wanna bring?
i have my doubts about the link between pink/purple and the undeliberate aggresion shown in the picture. of course theres the problem that your images are transparent and this makes the uses of colour quite challenging but on the other hand you can make big changes to the whole mood just by adding different colour sheets onto the background. if it was my work i would try out many colours just to see what the effekt would be...

also maybe a thing that could ad alot to the picture is thinking about the frame around your separate images, you did this very nice with the eye that opens and the girl that looks back and also in the pages in which text is added(there you have subtle blurry effekts between the different images which really makes a connection between the separate images and the background, also the "so i go on alone "and the "alone except for the voices"images makes this beautifull connection).


grtz
lume

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/5.jpg