Downshift pencil preview

[gr4f]

Hey everybody! I've finally got around to putting my comic together, it's only taken forever lol...This is a personal project, but I am hoping to land a gig doing a couple pages here and there or maybe a pin-up or 2 in the meantime...These pages have a lot of flashbacks in them, so I know that the panels don't really "read" the way that they should. Also, I know that the backgrounds are sparse, but I will be adding those in digitally. I'd like to show the finished products, but I am going to submitting the finals to various publishers and maybe the Zuda contest...any crits are welcomed! Thanks guys!

Pages:

http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j112/graf0214/downshiftpage1final.jpg

http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j112/graf0214/downshiftpage3final.jpg

http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j112/graf0214/downshiftpage4final.jpg

http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j112/graf0214/downshiftpage5final.jpg

Laters! :steph:

[derelic7]

I like it alot. The depth translates very very well, which impresses me considering you're working with very strong blacks and whites.

I can tell you have a knack for cars, love that. :)

I think the faces could use a tad more definition, some parts of the girls are looking kinda flat, cleavage, shoes etc, but it will probably read better in color. Maybe look over the skater girl a bit? Personally I think her right foot is abit flat, her stomach could use more of a strong shape, and a tighter chin. The right arm feels bent in an awkward angle. These are all minor details however..
I would love to get an idea of the story.. Don't be such a tease ;)