Jump Jet James

[Jonny Boy]

Here are pages 7,8,9 from a comic demo I'm working on. Characters are co created by myself and Nathan Edmondson, script also by Nathan Edmondson.430091

[kev ferrara]

Some nice designs here. Good strong color. Good poses, gestures and facial expressions. The eye seems to flow nicely from panel to panel. Sweet action.

Crits: The blur ain't foolin' anybody. Draw correctly what needs to be drawn correctly and don't think that blur makes bad drawing okay. Photoshop blur bad.

The linework on your machines and structures is simply too organic looking. Everything is going to mush. If everything looks like mush, human skin won't contrast enough to stand out. Get a ruler and some French Curves and be precise in your drawing where it is called for. Your machines must look like machines. Buy a few micron tech pens to use with your ruler and french curves.

Texture separates. Make sure concrete looks like concrete, metal looks like metal, hair looks like hair, etc. Or else you are going to continue to have everything turn to mush on you.

Anatomy: More mush: I'm not seeing bone structure, proper musculature or solid-looking form. I would recommend George Bridgman's anatomy books. They're cheap and great. Copy them over into your notebooks, line for line. Read and understand the text. Books include 100 Hands, Constructive Anatomy, Life Drawing, The Human Machine.

Overall, nice job here and good luck.

Best,
kev

[Hyptosis]

Yeah, not loving the blur at all, but you've got some relaly strong elements. i loves the colors, and some of the faces. Just keep pumping it out. And stay away from the blur, it's killing your tool textures I think.

[bhanu]

Nice comics man..love the flow....from the last pages...
Me thinks visually the weakest page is the third one..Even though I love your colors too, I am a huge fan of your lines...and dunno if its a low res pic r wat bt lines look more like pixels here. Well about the issue of blurs..I know you arent using blur to hide stuff...have you seen templesmiths artwork...beautiful use of blurs/lensflares and what not....But he uses them with a tact...try understanding tht...I am sure it'll be easy for someone of your skill level, hell personally I dont think your art needs blurs...you are awesome without it...also I think you gotta work on getting a better way to draw smaller figures/figures that are far off..somehow they look quite odd to me...
Anyways I know you will get a publisher....the arts very commercial feel to it...and looks good anyways....
Take care

[Jonny Boy]

I"ve updated the last page, without the blur. I think I'll use French Curves next time, good point.

[mkat]

this stuff is cool, its very intruiging. the color is great. great job, hoping to see more in the future.

[bhanu]

Wow without the blur....just wow.

[Jonny Boy]

Thanks guys, I think the blur definitely took away from it.

[voraz]

Very cool stuff, please post more! :D