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SpikeVallentine
June 7th, 2008, 03:50 AM
Update: hmm, i cant upload it on this site so here is a link:
http://coldcity.deviantart.com/art/SpeedAnim5-BattleCool-87915689



Yay, just finished today:

I would love your bashful, hardcore criticism. I appreciate and appreciated future and past criticism.

Practice practice practice!

Maestro Andres
June 8th, 2008, 10:05 AM
I really like the animations you are doing, great dedication and storytelling in them. They are very entertained and like how you incorporate music effectively. With this last one, composition wise, I think you are overusing a bit much side views for your battle sequences. I know that side views are easier to animate for battle sequences but try spicing things up by tilting the camera, changing the view, make the camera enhance the feeling of dynamism and action. See how they are doing it in today's anime such as Naruto, Bleach, even the Advent Children movie, or better yet, watch MontyOum Dead Fantasy videos :) Anyways, this stuff is great, keep at it!

SpikeVallentine
June 8th, 2008, 12:51 PM
I really like the animations you are doing, great dedication and storytelling in them. They are very entertained and like how you incorporate music effectively. With this last one, composition wise, I think you are overusing a bit much side views for your battle sequences. I know that side views are easier to animate for battle sequences but try spicing things up by tilting the camera, changing the view, make the camera enhance the feeling of dynamism and action. See how they are doing it in today's anime such as Naruto, Bleach, even the Advent Children movie, or better yet, watch MontyOum Dead Fantasy videos :) Anyways, this stuff is great, keep at it!

thank you for your honesty! YES!!! profiles are such a sneaky way to slide by,ahhaha. but yes, thank you!!

I like your criticism a lot, that makes a lot of sense. yesssss.
Thank you!

and i chekced out MontyOum Dead Fantasy, i remember seeing his creations before, yes! i must study him.

Zilant
June 9th, 2008, 01:12 PM
Damn, your productive.
The story is cute, in a macabre sort of way.
The depth of field you occasionally portray (by blurring the background) is awful nice, it brings variety to the piece and helps to keep the linework from feeling flat.

Camera shake is a nice effect to help us feel those sword clashes.
But the shakes start before the blows are actually struck, muddling the oomph of it a little. The trembling is a nice touch, especially during emotional moments. But at times I think you were a little generous with it. For example the Female Lead seems pretty damned carefree, it's a bit dramatic for her to tremble and cower when she first mentions there's no prize money when she's so nonchalant and perky about it a moment later.

Monty Oum is alright to study.
His Martial Arts Choreography cherry picks from Hollywood at times, and as a result his characters can be a mishmash of styles and characterizations. This was more prevalent in Haloid than Dead Fantasy II, but I digress. For the Fanservice personified that it is, that's all in good fun and makes for a great result, but for the sake of education I'd recommend studying professional Fight Directors/Martial Arts Choreographers directly.

(I'm not saying the man doesn't do his homework, but that you should be doing his homework too.)