Go Go Yubari

[jorzac]

A w.i.p., one of the assassins of the film, Kill Bill . I was goin for a kind of bird's eye view. Crits an' tips, comments, appreciated.
http://mysite.verizon.net/vze6s1kl/sitebuildercontent/sitebuilderpictures/aye.jpg

[sf09]

I'm new to the scene, but here's my 2 cents worth....

The lineart's quite good, and the view's nice too.

Coming to perspective, the top half of the body looks good, but the legs look a little odd. Maybe you should try changing the leg's pose a bit, and pherhaps change the lower part of the leg to make it smaller, more "converging" towards the bottom; foreshortening. The feet are too big, I think. I feel that the hips are a tad too low, or is it me only?

Her right palm needs a little tweaking. Her left fingers look right, but maybe a little longer? Oh and maybe her skirt a little rounder at the bottom edge.

The left eye, has an extra line at the bottom?

Maybe you would like to check this site out: http://www.fotosearch.com/rubberball/silhouettes-of-bodies-in-motion/RBL135/, taken from this thread (http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?s=&threadid=2318).

BTW, the pose's kinda dramatic , did you come up with it?
Hope that helps. :)

[GirafeEnFeu]

I like the feet.

[Boris]

The feet do look a bit odd.
I also notice the weird angle of the spikes but im sure they were just roughly drawn as they are drawn light.

[zeroe]

i think the main problem is that the feet are too big, especially the left one. this throws persepective off IMO.
Other than that good job, will we see this colored?

[alex_86]

Also her nose in the move was nowhere near as cute. I would take another look at it. But overall your progressing nicely :D

[Carnifex]

yes,the feet are too big for this kind of perspective.also you should maybe consider broading her hips a tiny bit.define her eyes a bit more(edges) and one thing i noticed is that the head is in perspecitve,but the lips aren't.if you think about the perspective,they're too thick.her left leg is irritating me also.mainly the shoe and then the way the upper leg blends into the knee and the lower leg.

[jorzac]

man, all you people rock!! yes, i did change the feet, they were too big and distracting. as for her nose and lips, i took liberties with them both.

hetr hips, i must say stay that way because they were never wide(imo).

thanx for all the help,i'll post the finished inked version soon!!!