bloodbath1 -5

[Grendel]

THese pages arent done - scanner still hasnt come yet
but here is the simeon stuff so far. Bloom will be paiting over these.
Page 1


http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/1.jpg


page2
http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/2.jpg

page 3

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/3.jpg

page4
http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/simeon.jpg

page5

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/simeonpg5.jpg

[gallon]

I think it hard to say anything. when there's colour and text added these usually work beautifully and looks really nice.

MM , what I'm trying to say is....it's a comic...give us the text (or else I don't get the story)! I'll repost and give more solid crits if you add text (mmmh, can't wait ...can you?;))

[walking-in-minefield]

can't really say anything too, that is until the color's added, i don't think text is really neccesary, i can tell what's going on, but some of the scenes are a little too distorted, and I had to really look and mostly guess, to find out what's going on, anyways can't wait until its finished

[Grendel]

will do when its done being colored and lettered its all yyour s to cut up heh

[Phuzion]

Can't say anything... *grumbles*
I think there's a great sense of motion in all the panels. And the story is totally understandable so far even without the text. I like the dad going agro... very cool. Can't wait to see it in color, but the black and white still looks cool.

[Johannes]

Overall feel - It looks absolutely stunning!
Favourite cell (?) is page 3 - dad goes postal (or something)

page 3 - bottom - monster needs bigger claws on feets imho :)
page 4, where the gun is close up with finger needs some detail.
page 4 fighting, dad holds gun toward monster head, a bit too stiff
page 5 bottom triangle cell - its unclear to me what happens here??
page 5 dad holds kids - I want it to be a closer crop - a more closer moment

Really good dad, nice kids and teddy characters
Thats my 1skr :D

[Grendel]

Thats not the dad both of the kids parents die by the werewolves the guy saving them is the main character simeon.
Guess i didnt depeict that well.