kingwip (1st post)

[qball]

Here's a doodle I did today and am thinking about cleaning up and coloring. I am more of a 3d guy by trade, but I need to throw down a pencil once in a while for my sanity. Not drawing is not an option. :) Tell me what ya think.

http://members.cox.net/jmellon/kingwip.jpg

[Danilo]

Nice details but there is no compact form of whole figure. Looks like body parts droped on one place, but your shading is great. I will just try to spend more time with simple shapes, rather than add details early.

[Cadence]

That's some great pencil work, but I have to admit, I'm having trouble placing the rest of his body. Maybe you should work more on his body before coloring the piece, which by the way I recommend heartily :D

[bustabustu]

It's hard to tell his left arm is draped across his chest reaching over his right shoulder. I think once you finish the chair it he will stand out more..

[qball]

Wow, thanks peeps. It is all coming to light now. His mid section shadows are being hid by his akward arm set up. This confuses his form. I had a longer reply in mind, but I'll just leave it at that. I will tweek and repost for opinions.

[killing.people]

this is looking pretty good.
your proportions and perspective seem off a bit. you jumped into rendering a little too soon, the problems now are set in stone once you shade and texture your sketch.

in my opinion his shoulders are too far apart. granted im no medium sized hulk-jesus like your subject - well a moderately-huge jesus, buut, a person's forearm is about the length of the upper arm, `tis also the measurement between sholders.

create the angle his arm is in with your arm, keep it at that angle while placing your hand on your far shoulder .. you shouldn't be able to do it. it is slight. but it looks odd to me.

the easiest way to fix it, i can see, would be to lower his right shoulder, that is behind his left arm feeding the bird.

his crown is off center

the bird might look more natural, perched opposed to walking on a curved surface.

it might help the entire piece to tilt it a few degrees counter-clockwise.

the king of king's thrown's perspective is off.
i would face the arm and back toward the viewer.
-take the edge off the back
-draw a new arm on his thrown facing the viewr more. lift it so it is in about the same persepective as his leg.

-killing.mellon

congrats on the job. ;)