nightmare trainride

[gallon]

MMmh, this has to be one of the strangest jobs I've gotten so far. It's gonna illustrate a scene from a horror RPG, and the image will be printed in a magazine. It's finished for now, but tomorrow I'll go and meet the Art director and chances are I'll have to add lots and lots of more blood and gore...

If I ever have been glad to post here it's now, because this is finally finished :)

http://mywebpage.netscape.com/henrikgallon/kupe3visa.jpg

*edit* in the bottow part there be the articles headline ( dunno if it called that, text anyway ;))

[OLSEN]

I want to see more blood!!

Other then that, its a great piece of work, and i cant find anything bad to crit. All good. :)


Btw, What media did you use?

[gallon]

oh, I have to give some background info...
some magicians are trying to escape an avenging angel and try to switch bodys with some backpackers on a train. In the middle of this ritual the train crashes, and the freed magic power tears the magicians apart... after that the youngsters awaken, and wonder what have happened. May sound cheesy, the descriptions of the mess in the text are pretty vivid though.

Olsen: I havent touched paper or canvas at all on this one...100% digitalius :) (but my eyes, it burns...it burns )

[Howdy]

hmmm, I don't feel it. ;(

Explosion would make the area much messier and destroyed. The shelf on the left is undamaged. I do not know why the man is staring upwards towards me. The person on the ground? The arm looks odd. It is broken off at the elbow. If you look at how it hangs, that is the natural way an arm bends I belive. Why would it break if it was bent in the natural bend direction? Far wall is also undamaged. People look too clean. No soot or blast debris on them. Hair unmussed. The techinique is all good. The emotional feel of the piece is what I miss.

That is what I see. /me shrugs.

[OLSEN]

Howdy-> The magician was torn apart by the magical energies, gallon didnt say he exploded in a fireball. Also, the bones in the arm is quite clearly not connected to each other anymore, so the arm can bend anyway the artist sees fit, even the normal way. And, i disagree with everything else you said too. Yup.

And the mood is great, but it does need more blood. (I love horror RPG:s and everything about them, and this piece is very horror RPG, thats why i bother :D)

[darkcult]

I like the way your man is staring at me,
gives that extra sense of creepiness and scare.
Very residentevil feel to this one.

I like it too.

( ...and yes, it needs more blood !!!)

[3DZealot]

Interesting.

Honestly, when I first looked at the pic, I was drawn to the shoe in the lower left on the rack. The little bit of blood dripping off. Sorta got the feeling that a drop of blood fell on the guy looking up at us...which is what made him look up...and now we are seeing his face as if just before he goes nuts...kinda like the drop of blood was the "straw that broke the camel's back" so-to-speak.

Actually, that could be a very cinematic moment if it were a movie.

I feel as though the anatomy could use some work too. Oh, and if you look at the mutilated arm, normal function would not allow that position...try it...but not too hard...don't want to hurt yourself. Hehe.

While I'm not a fan of the subject matter, overall, it's pretty well done.

-3DZ

:D

[LEN]

this type of narrative illustration is why I started drawing in the first place. Well, done

[gallon]

Len: jup, it's fun...very interesting to do pics based on someone elses ideas...but difficult as well.

3DZealot: woha, You found the story within the story :). If you look closely (don't think it'll even show in this compressed version) You'll see a stain of blood in that guys forehead, and if you look even closer there's also a splash of blood on his glasses.
Actually that backward facing arm was one of the AD's wishes. HE wanted the magicians bodys to be broken in unatural ways. I thought the easiest way to achive this was to bend the arm "wrong".

Darkcult: THanks
Olsen: thanks. :)


Howdy: I see what u n mean. I'd considered adding more debris, texture and so fourth, but in the end it came down to time and deadlines. Really have to think about priorities the next time to get the right "feel", maybe instead of making a lot of details that probably won't show when printed anyways :(.

About the blood... more blood would be nice , I agree. The reason there is relative little blood is because I'll use this as a portfolio piece for other jobs (hopefully childrens book and learning materials), and that's why I toned this down...Maybe a bad call though..but I don't want to be "the blood and guts-guy). That wont gimme money heheh :)

[Wetterschneider]

Gallon, that's an excellent painting and the narrative does come through. I have only one comment for you - don't include gory work in a portfolio that is going out for children's work or educational materials - build up a second more targeted body of images that are brighter and cuter and aimed to the client. This will cause the art buyer to slam your portfolio shut and never contact you again if you use it to apply at a textbook company for instance - I know because I've been there.