"I miss you" for a girl friend. [UPDATED]

[morphine]

Sooo... tell me what do you think.

Girls: if you were to receive something like this, what would you think of the guy who sent it? *ashamed*

OLD ONE:
http://www.morphinemedia.com/images/digital/miss_you_lo.jpg

NEWER:
http://www.morphinemedia.com/images/digital/miss_you_lo2.jpg

[jester]

What I would think? Depends. If it were my partner/fiancee/boy-friend: Great! Anybody else: Too intimate. Apart from that: I don't know whether you used a real rose as reference but to me the top seems too bulky.

Jester

[morphine]

Hehe Thank you Jest :)

Well... it's for a girl I almost had something if I can say that. heheh But she's not just a common friend anyway.

And nah, I didn't use anything as reference. I should've.
I was talking to a friend and so I decided to add some more color variations on it, like some more yellow, maybe some light brown... I'm only using "white" light for awhile.

Thankyee for commenting. ;)

[killing.people]

that is really .. cute.

it really is!!?

:barf:

edit: yellow in the pink good idea!

[Anthony]

Depends on how strong her mushy street is. Some girls have longer ones than others. If she's more practical, though, she may wonder what that is dripping out of the flower, as it doesn't really look like water(due to its opacity, specular level, and the way its falling a little sideways, as though its hanging on). :D Good work though, keep at it! If you do send it, you'd better follow up with an invitation to something upbeat and FUN, not a droning overly-dramatic type of message. Everyone likes fun, ya know?

[morphine]

killing: uhh... yeah. well, at least you were... sincere.

Anthony: water issue: bleh. heh
Good point on the fun factor though. I'll think about it. Maybe yeah, it's a bit over exaggerated.

[vudu]

oh, that's something really nice :)

You could darken the background for stronger impression. And may be make the canvas book-typed (not album) coz to my mind there's smth wrong with composition here -- to much empty space.

[morphine]

Updated.
Changed the flower part of the rose, changed the water a bit, desaturated the leaves, added some water drops... sharpened up some things...

But I didn't add extra lights yet. I've tried to work it on Painter, but dang, it's soooo different from what I'm used to work with.

vudu: I'm thinking on adding a background there, more flowers at a distance (as in a garden), or something. maybe even a wall.
I'm not sure what you meant with making the canvas book-typed. Could you elaborate it a bit more, please?

edit: I feel dumb. heh. Did you mean Portrait, not Landscape?

Thanks for the feebee, peeps! =)

[vudu]

:) heh-heh... my english... ...

yeah... PORTRAIT (that's it! In russian it is called book-type or vertical). As the rose is vertical the canvas will emphasize it.

and another thought of mine: if you darken the inner space of the flower it will look a bit more volumetric.

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[jester]

The second one is much better than the first!

Jester

[miasmak]

the drippy stuff looks more like water now, maybe some depth in the background. reference for the flower would be a good idea.

Now on the girlie, emotional level, unless you know she likes this kind of stuff, aah how shall I put this, my reaction would be ... claustrophobia ... wipes sweat of hands ... is he still following me.

on the other hand a fluffy soft toy would probably be worse (for me anyway)

- but please don't let me discourage you, my reactions may not be inline with the rest of the female population and/or she may know what you mean -