Holy crap I've gotten better since my first post. Thanks CA!

[iambanana]

SKIP TO THE LAST PAGE FOR THE NEWEST STUFF.

First off, I'll write a few words about myself, what I do, and why I'm here. I'm Syver Lauritzsen, a 17 year old boy from the frosty tundras of Norway (It's really not that cold) Most of my time goes away to playing in a band. There I play the guitar and...sing. But when I'm not doing that, I'm usually drawing.
I signed up at conceptart because it looked like alot of fun. I'm not looking to start a career in drawing, it's just a hobby.
I do actually have a real job too, though. I work at a bathroom tile store called Megaflis. There I sell tiles. So if you need to know ANYTHING about tiles, just ask.

So I guess I'll post some of my stuff here.

Just got a wacom like a week ago, so now I can finally get some work into a digital medium (Don't have a scanner)

Please, I'm always looking to improve, so don't use silk gloves while giving critique.

http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/spongebackfinished-1.jpg
My webcam
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/webcam.jpg
Speedpainting. 40 mins.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/dsg2.jpg
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/wow2.jpg
Another speedpainting of spiderman. 15 mins.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/spidermancopy.jpg
An unfinished portrait of a friend.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/anni.jpg
Self portrait
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/1.jpg
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/jap.jpg
Me and a friend.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/syverogjulian.jpg
I started a portrait of a singer in a pretty famous band. Bonus points for guessing correctly. Obviously, I didn't finish it.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/jules.jpg
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/manman.jpg
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/Untitled-6.jpg

Please, give crits and stuff. Also, feel free to do paintovers or whatever.

[iambanana]

Did a teen challenge. Topic: Post Apocalyptical Warlord
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/teenchallengecopy.jpg

[Mr. Gadbury]

Hey, thanks for the kind words in my sketchbook - What brush do you use, is it oils? And on what opacity roughly, I'm assuming its Painter?

The two black and white portraits are awesome, I'll watch this sketchbook !

[iambanana]

Did a few bodystudies this evening. One was for a friend, hence the norwegian writing.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/tilcecilie.jpg
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/Untitled-7.jpg

[iambanana]

Some.......thing.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/8.jpg

[iambanana]

Speedpainting. Around 15 mins.
http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/Untitled-2.jpg

[GiantRibot]

nice. i especailly like the "me and a friend" piece.

keep drawing and you'll probably take my job in a few years.

good luck

[iambanana]

just a quick doodlydoodle

[iambanana]

I was asked by a friend to make a mean looking warrior. This is my thought process. Not really happy with the result. I suck at colouring.

[Lotet]

man, ur starting to scare me, u got some freaky stuff there haha


anyway, i think you should rework your post apocalyptic dude, cause that first pic of the "mean looking warrior" is pwning ur dessert pirates ass =P

[Mr. Gadbury]

hey, nice body drawings, but maybe it would be easier to use a large brush to bang in values quickly and then narrow it down as it builds in detail, it looks like it must have taken ages with all those lines! Maybe I'm wrong, the 15 min speed painting looks pretty good for 15 mins! Cool step-by-Step too, thanks. Keep it up mate, I'll be checking the next update !

[iambanana]

Gee guys, thanks for the friendly comments:D

Lotet: I thought about redoing the post apocapolytprtisryrtt(can't spell) thing, but there is already that black and white WIP there, and I sortta just ripped off that technique, so it would turn out kinda the same. Maybe I'll do something similar next time though;)

Gadbury: Actually, the brush I'm using is quite large. It's a splatter brush, which basically consists of lots of small dots.

And now for a 30 minute pic. Tried out my first texture.

[Connie Cane]

Hey, nice stuff here. I really enjoy the self portrait one.

[Mr. Gadbury]

Ahh right okay hehe

[iambanana]

Todays update: A dead person!

[Connie Cane]

Yay dead people! He looks more asleep than dead though.
I do like the textures on the ground and his wrinkles.

[iambanana]

A simple mech I cooked up.

[iambanana]

Some cattish thing.

[Camara]

Use harder brushes to go into detail.Maybe you should go further with pencils before digital.Think about different perspectives,more dinamic.And do more anatomy studies!

Cheers!

[iambanana]

Just a little lighting experiment. Am I thinking this out correctly?

[iambanana]

The cave monster thingies are old.
The other two scans are a few studies I just did.

[iambanana]

Made this for my mothers birthday. Tried to make it look like a postcard.

[RaistlinTheDark]

i don't know...maybe u should have more pencil sketches

[funfetus]

I agree with the last guy. At this point, you should be focusing on your basic drawing skills. Get the Loomis books (http://acid.noobgrinder.com/Loomis), and read them, and do what they say. Good luck!

[iambanana]

Oh, you seem to have misunderstood. I do alot of pencil and pen sketching. Ït's just that it takes so damn long to scan stuff, and I'm damn lazy. Most of the sketches aren't of humans though, or anatomically correct humans anyway. More cartoonish. I have a digital version of a Loomis book, can't remember the name.
Only problem is I don't really have time to read it, working on getting my driver's license, and therefore have more important things to read.
Will get to it though, when I have the time.

[Flipnastywebby]

always use your turn signal
the break is on the left, on the left!
check your mirrors
wear your bloody seat belt
green means go, red means stop, unless there is no one there then its a stoptional.
pass other cars in the left lane
the speed limit is a sugestion.

there thats all you need to know about driving, unless youre from jersey, rules apparently apply to no one in that bloody state.


now about your art work ::
i really like the line work you have here
http://www.conceptart.org/forums/attachment.php?attachmentid=279310&stc=1&d=1200146223
it very egon schields (spelling?)
if you dont know who he is, google is a wonderful thing.
as for your coloring, use a hard edged brush.
alot of your paintings look like a blurry photo.

you dont need to "read" books anymore, youre an artist. you create images.
so draw from the book. I personally have no idea what bridgman is ever talking about but i can draw the shapes he can draw.

all joking aside, keep pushing your line work, try drawing on the computer in ust lines, this way you wont have to scan stuff in.

good luck on your driving test
Slainte! :pirate:

[Flipnastywebby]

hey man thanks for swinging by the sketchbook.
as for the pencil, is a .5 hb lead draftmatic mechanical pencil.
its heavy and sexy and i never have to sharpen the pencil :pirate:
i love all types of pencils, woodless, wooden, and the like, but for tight drawings
like ive been doing as of late, the mechanical pencil is best friend....for now.

look forward to seeing more of your stuff
Slainte!

[Camara]

. Most of the sketches aren't of humans though, or anatomically correct humans anyway. More cartoonish.

Uf,man,I just post an angry reply in other SB for this reason.Since when cartoon has to be strictly "not anatomically correct"????????????????!!!!!!

[Mr. Gadbury]

Nice updates man, some of those creatures are scary haha,

keep it up!

[iambanana]

Some pages of my sketchbook. Man, the scanner at school sucks HARD! Damn annoying.

[iambanana]

I guess this is the evidence that the scanner at school sucks compared to the one I have at home. A few pages of my sketchbook. Quite happy with some of the sketches.

[XXITheWorld]

I like your style, especially on paper (Hmn I'm not really good on the computer either but ah well, practice makes perfect)

One thing I noticed though is the disproportion in your character's hips, you should make them larger, especially womens

[iambanana]

I feel as if I've really evolved since I joined conceptart. So thank you, conceptart.

Here are some sketch book pages, along with a few sin city-inspired comic book panels. One is of Marv, the other of some random guy with a gun.
We're doing this film noir thing for a school project, so I'm just getting my inspiration going.

[Lotet]

"My Sketchbook. Check it out or die."

HA! i didnt check it out and im still alive, take that!
whait a minute...im here, looking at the sketchbook right now...D´OH!

anyway =P nice update, i like the pencil stuff, keep drawing^^

[iambanana]

I think I have quite a bit of sketches in my sketchbook that are unshown here. Problem is, the sketchbook is at school so I can't upload that shite now.

[iambanana]

Random quick ninjasketch

[iambanana]

Made this for a friend of mine. 1 1/2 hours I guess.

[iambanana]

Uploading quite a bit of sketches today. I just can't seem to be able to draw a decent female.

[iambanana]

Joker!

[Lotet]

thanks for dropping by at my SB, this new stuff really shows potential, the ninja guy is really sweet! though u gotta work more on faces, keep drawing and keep posting man, ur getting there.

[Hamsta]

Thanks for dropping by :^^:

Now how about some life drawings from you? Maybe studies?
Everything seems to be from your head, and further more, I'm not sure you're really trying to step out of your comfort zone.

On the other hand, you have a strong style, and perfecting it might be what works for you. (A decent women is still something you should have in your arsenal ;) )

[Matthew Forte]

Very nice stuff man, I like your style! You said you had loomis lying around, and I believe it shows, your stuff is damn good. I would like to see you work on faces, though. While yours are okay, there are some proportional issues. Good luck!

[Arrowhead]

The one of your cat like creature is my fav so far...
Theres a great deal of potential in your skills seeing as your only 17...
Ill be checking back on ya-

[iambanana]

Weee! My first post as an 18-year-old!

Lotet: Thanks for the compliments, I've begun to work alot on faces, and it is really beginning to pay off as well. Don't think I would've done it if it hadn't been for your comment here.
Hamsta: Thank you for kind words. You're right, I only have one life drawing in here (The guy with the guitar) and I can see how it would help me. Females are the next thing I'm gonna learn to draw. I sketch them alot, although I don't post many of them.
Matthew Forte: Actually, I've never really studied the book, just looked at the pics. Good faces coming right up!
Arrowhead: Glad you liked my cat thing! Thanks for stopping by!

Now for the pictures I'm uploading.
The black and whites are for a movie me and a few friends made for a school project. If you want to see it, heres a link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F3GAUWyHcAo
My job in the project was to create the art, the music, write half the script, direct and (Against my will) act.
The others are random drawings. The one with the big banner was heavily inspired by a guy in the art crusades.

[thesadpencil]

hey nice sb you got here. you've got pretty sweet designs and ideas. i think some more anatomy study definitely wouldn't hurt. also try working more on the values in the paintings to help bring up the contrast. keep it up!

[Grafguy]

nice stuff, great ideas id love to see some more finished work :)

[iambanana]

Women and some anatomy.

[zulu]

Hi there, i have 18 too xD, nice stuff you got there, you must keep practicing!, check my sb if u have time, keep it coming! cheers!:)

[iambanana]

A few sketches I did recently and a piece I spent about two hours on with an animated GIF of the process. Not extremely happy with the colouring, but it's still the best human I've made to date. Used some ref from a tutorial by Idiot Apathy.

EDIT: If you can't see the GIF being animated, it's because your browser has already played through it. Just refresh the page.

[speedysam267]

the last girl looked really good, it has a nice atmosphere to it. and that guy with the glasses it the man. and the girl with the cigarette is really striking! keep it up bro and thanks for the post in me SB!

[Evergrey]

I agree with speedysam, that last girl is really nice. Well done with shadows and highlights! though the joker and that other guy way up the page is colored real cool also i think ^^
keep it up!

[Glory666]

hey man, nice stuff. Big improvment since your first post, keep it up!

[iambanana]

A teen challenge (Topic was High Tech Knight) and a speedpaint.

[iambanana]

10 minute quickie. I like this one.

[Peter Coene]

Hey, thanks for the SB comment.

As for yours, you have lots of ideas, and thats a good start. It looks like you've gotten to the point where you are confident in your ability to draw, as in you are drawing what your mind tells you to draw and putting the line where your mind tells you it is supposed to go, which is good: your hands are trained.

The next trick is to train your mind, especially in learning the human form. You've already got some ideas in your head of how it should be (wider at the shoulders, narrower at the waiste) however thats just a start. In your sketches it is perfectly fine to show an underdrawing, so use and underdrawing to plot out the basic skeletal form: ribcage, pevis, trunk connecting ribs & pelvis, upper leg, lower leg, foot, upper arm, lower arm, hand. Don't bother with the external details untill you have that figured out, then lay in the muscle groups.

Also, the only ovals you should be drawing are in the ribcage and the head. Do NOT draw the limbs with ovals, or else you will get sausage links for arms and that just doesn't work. It looks like you are starting to figure that out in some of the newer ones, but I figured that it wouldn't hurt if I reminded you.

[KLEVR]

Splatter cat is my fav of these. That joker looks really fresh too, never seen a take on him quite like that, I also like the woman smoking the cig. Your gesture stuff looks good and i like your facial studies, anatomy is a bit rough, but that can be remedied with more life study. go up and ask random girls if you can quickly sketch their picture, most of the time they're really flattered, and you get the benefit of practice so everyone's happy. For the digital stuff, i would say it's better to go in with a stronger working initial sketch before painting. The april 17th post is solid. keep up the good work!

[kelly x]

I like your pure black / white and #53/#54 really good start for such an old guy -- ha ha... keep working on the anatomy and you'll rock the world!!

[iambanana]

So lately I've been practicing how to best prortray different moods. So I've been doing tons of speedpaints.
Also, I included three different temperatures for the same pic, to see what works best. What do you guys think?

[Lotet]

duuude, that last one(three?) is awezome, i dont care which one looks the best, they all look great in theyr own way.

keep em coming dude

[iambanana]

My first real portrait. Used a picture of myself as reference, and made myself look alot older. Real happy with this one.

[SkyTheArtist]

You weren't kidding! You say you were worse than me when you joined (Dec 2007? 'Round 7 months ago!) and you're already so good? I'm very impressed. ^^ I love your paintings, especially the backgrounds. And also, thank you very much for the feedback on my SB. :) I bet in the next seven months you'll be even better!

Keep on drawing!

[Mischeviouslittleelf]

Ganske mye bra greier her, men det du mangler er studier. Det er hva du bør konse på det neste året, gjøre en hel masse studier av kropp, muskler, ansiktstrekk og selvportretter. Dette hjelper en hel masse. du bør også laste ned de videoene de har her på siden, de er ganske bra og lærerike. eller du kan ta deg en runde på Bobby Chiu's Schoolism, som også er ganske bra saker.

Skolen jeg går på heter Einar Granum Kunstfagskole. Det er ikke mye digitale verktøy i bruk der for øyeblikket, men jeg driver å smugler inn laptoppen når vi bedriver akt og slikt og jeg har konvertert et par av lærerne så revolusjonen er i gang. Granum er i alle fall en flott skole og om du bidrar selv får du mye ut av de to årene du har mulighet til å gå der.

Om du bor i nærheten av Oslo kan du jo bli med på søndags sketching. møtes kl 3 på nasjonalteeateret hver søndag:)

-E

[Mischeviouslittleelf]

He he, jeg er også fra bærum faktisk, Stabekk for å være pressis, og det er ikke noe å vente med å komme på tegnetreff, den beste måten å forbedre seg på og jeg digger å møte nye mennesker. Drikker du kaffe? håper jeg virkelig:) I alle fall, skal ut på onsdag og tegne, så om du har tid så kom. Nummeret mitt er 92849414, vi møtes kl 12 ved nationalteateret:)

-E

[KonnA]

Very cool sketchbook, I see your a fan of Sin city, I like those cause' so do I!

Also loving this http://www.conceptart.org/forums/attachment.php?attachmentid=381495&stc=1&d=1212312678

[RandAlThor]

Looking god dude, def improvement since the start and it looks like your on track to keep it up, One thing i would suggest tho, is having a go at some anatomy studies esp the underlying bone structure and proportions. Keep sharing ;-)

[iambanana]

Made a portrait of my girlfriend making a stupid face today. Ref from a photo.

[JailHouseRock]

Holy crap you've gotten better since your first post!

nice work man, big improvement!

now just keep it up.


matt,

[iambanana]

Just a quick sketch where I tried to imitate another dude's style.

[Lotet]

hehe, last one really looks like Quinns style! now u have to do my style to lol^^

[iambanana]

So I made an imitation of Lotet's style. Just something quick, and it is kind of an insult against Lotet, because his stuff is way greater than this.

Anyway, thought it may be good for a giggle.

[Evergrey]

haha, nice lotet-imitation there ^^
Great work, i like the portrait very much, keep it up!

[Lotet]

haha, i think it was kinda cute, my work might be a lot darker and more gothic, but u got the style down pretty well ^^

[RabbitHole]

First off, thanks for stopping by my sketchbook. Second....this is more proof that practice makes perfect. It seems like you're abilities exploded when you turned eighteen. Kinda like zits just appear on a thirteen-year-old's face one life-altering morning.
Do me a favor, bro? Do some more of the black and white stuff? My favorite drawing you've got in here is the one of the woman smoking, with heavy shadowing and light cross-hatching. need. more.

[iambanana]

Sorry for not having posted for so long. Been real busy with school. Been making a movie (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X8cR6PZomSg). Been having a girl friend.

My sketchbook is bursting to the seams though. I've improved tons over the summer. I'll try to get some pages scanned soon enough. Until then, all I have to show is two quick enviroments.

[iambanana]

So I started a new sketchbook in the beginning of this summer, and I've been drawing in it up until now. Somewhere in there, I must have seen Batman. I've been real lazy about scanning my sketches. I promise to get better. Here are a few of the pages. From old to new.:yayca:

[iambanana]

Made a quick steampunk mech-design based on one of my sketches.

[Sublimus]

Nice book so far. Make sure not to neglect drawing from reference, either photo or from life. What you can learn from direct observation is invaluable to anyone's progress!

[Surion]

Nice sketchbook.
Big improvement!

Keep pushing, you'll get there :D

[Qadi]

hey man thanks for commenting on my sb.
this page shows a lot of improvement, keep it up, hey isnt that the lead singer of the strokes on the first post. yeah and thanks for that soft brush thing youve told me about.

[eparts]

heisann.
kule skisser. jeg liker godt papirtegningene dine. de digitale tegningene dine blir fort litt flate og mangler litt "edge". Det jeg egentlig mener med det er at jeg synes du bruker veldig mange strøk og store bløte brushes som gjør det slitsomt å oppfatte formen. Formen vil jo selfølgelig blir mer overbevisende etter mer anatomistudie :) hm, hadde du tegnebrett?
Men stå på, hyggelig at du følger med på sketchbooken min. Sees kanskje ved videre kaffeskisserier

[iambanana]

Painted some zombies during an english lesson today. Trying to catch the mood. Also I made a few keyframes for a trailer we're making at school. They were pretty rushed, hence the sub-par quality.
And I almost forgot this tank sketch which was really quick and sloppy.

Pretty happy with the zombies though, only spent around 50 minutes on it, while at the same time listening to the effect of immigration in England.

[WickedEdges]

Thanks for stopping by my SB. Great stuff going on in here, keep it up. I'd like to see more studies though!

[andyhunt]

That zombie sketch has GREAT lighting. The fog looks pretty convincing. Great work.

[OmertA]

keep up the hard work its paying off.

[Ricardo Robles]

Here is a great improvement man. These last of zombies got a scary atmosphere, really well done. Keep it working well .

[SkyTheArtist]

Hey thanks for stopping by again! I've finally fixed the scanner, so if you wanna see what's new, go ahead and check it out. :)

I love how you put so many different things in your sketchbook! I think what caught my eye the most was the portrait of your girlfriend (I bet she loved it ^^) and the backgrounds. Your sketches are also real nice. Definitely showing improvement on your end too. :D

Keep on postin. :heart:

[Peetaer]

Loads of improvement here buddy. Keep em' coming. Are you doing any anatomy studies? Any studies of any sort (besides photo references)? Studies will help big time. From personal experience all I can say is that life drawings is the way to go! You learn so so much from them.

Rock on!

[Kim_bot]

Sweet stuff in here!
But work on those hands! Give them fingers, not mittens ;)

[iambanana]

wickededges: Thank you. Despite popular belief, I am doing a few studies. But I'm so shamefully bad at them that I rarely post them:P
andyhunt: Thank you so much. It took alot of colour adjustments to get it just right:)
OmertA: Thanks dude.
Ricardo Robles: Thanks. I do enjoy a good B-movie horror flick, which is what inspired me. Well, that and the zombie mode of Call of Duty 5.
SkyTheArtist: Thanks! Yeah she was pretty happy alright. Hadn't seen her for a few months so I thought I'd do something special.
Peetaer: Yep. I try to go out as often as possible and sketch people hanging around.
Kim bot: I know dude. I know it so well. I'm just to scared to ruin a good sketch with a lousy hand. But I'll get to studying them. Tomorrow. Or maybe next week. Or sometime next year... Just kidding. I'll get them soon enough!

For today, I have a few speedpaints, testing out my new custom brushes. I got a bit lost when I was designing the evil character.
I'm a bit annoyed at myself for sticking to enviros and not even trying to paint a character with a face. Just a bit too scared I guess. Gotta do something about that.

[Ahim]

this is one helluva sketchbook!

[sinneart]

Nice stuff! In some of your tonal explorations it looks like youre a bit hesitant to go darker - I say don't be afraid to push it a bit further!

[Gdand]

looking better everytime

[must1er]

wow all of this is jaw dropping.
i especialy love your futuristic soldier concept

[iambanana]

Not much for today. Just this quick head study.

[Mischeviouslittleelf]

Woooo! Masse bra her siden sist! MER!

Tre ting:

Hold deg unna pur hvit og ikke bland gjennom det heller

Gjør mere studier! Anatomi æand shit!

gJØR MER!

:D:D

-E

[Nrx]

Ok, holy shit your improvment is so fucking awesome..

thank you good sir, for now i am motivated once again to stop fucking slacking and start kicking some ass!

as for critique, its hard to spot problems in your work because you have so many sketches and relatively few finished pieces, so i'd say you need to finish some stuff up just to find out what your weaknesses are

[davekang]

It's always pleasing to see one involves. Keep up the passion mrbanana!!

[iambanana]

Thanks for all the feedback guys. Everything you're saying is going straight onto my to-do list.

First off I have a quick sketch of a few girls.

Next is the conquistador. Spent around 3 hours on him before I grew tired. I'm glad I did him though, since he made me have to do three things I'm to scared to try: Hands, faces and finished pieces.
Open for crits, of course.

[iambanana]

Realized that the conquistador's arm was way too long, so I shortened it a bit.

[Mr. Smile]

Great improvement you got here sir! "Winter" is my favourite so far.

Btw, have I seen a joker samurai back there? Mad. Heh heh. He´s right though, don´t be so serious. Smile for a bit.

[iambanana]

Bingo Smile. Didn't think anyone would notice him. You sure have an eye for detail. Cheers!

[iambanana]

I'm doing a storyboard-ish gig for an interactivity-company. My first paid art-job :D
Anyways, here's the first sketch. Let me know what you guys think.

[ashess]

Hello there Banana! 've been leafing trough the thread. really great envo's and good figure's too! sometimes the ppl from imagination get a little uncomfortable but that's nothing that a lot of modeldrawong wont fix; I love what you do with light and your linework's great too.

now, onto the storyboard. first of all, congrats on your first paying gig. and welcome to the hard and painfull world of trying to understand what a cusomer wants ;)
I'm not sure how much of the storyboard we see here is prescribed by the curstomer, and how much is your own imput. I know how difficult espec technical companies can get b'c they don't understand what it means to translate a pictoral message and keep wanting to get their facts in there.
right now, for me in the storyboard there's a lot of uncertaintly for an ingorant viewer;
first of all, the picture on the billboard seems to command our main character to smile. (I also think the first panel will work stronger if we get the sence of this person walking by, and just noticing the billboard.) 2nd panel is fine; but the third -espec thanks to their silly name-, seems to imply or main person sending the text message 'never, no!'; basically saying he refuses to smile..
perhaps showing an extra panel where the message changes into this orange message will fix part of that.
from there on, I imagine the 'signal' has to pass into all the different media streams you show? again with the orange line I'd say. oh, and let the orange line return to the man's billboard, and then the smiley appears.
lol. that's my 50 cents. hope you dont mind so much critque. I used to draw children's animation storyboards @ my stage. learned a lot from that; but a lot had to be redone than too.

[Leo Ki]

I'm glad ashess is leading this Storyboard Emergency Rescue Operation, because I'm a bit stuck ^^
Could you explain some more about who will use the storyboard in that company?
Are you free to organize it the way you like? Can you use flowcharts too?
(I only browsed quickly through your thread so far, 'Til Anni' stood out to my eyes.)

[iambanana]

I've been way to lazy when it comes to uploading sketches. Therefore, everytime I DO upload sketches, there's so damn many. Some of these are from life, some are studies from Loomis/Bridgman, and most are from imagination. Please let the crits rip!

[Royzy]

Great work man! Really enjoyed looking through your sketches.

And holy crap, yes you have got better since your first post, must be a great feeling to see how much you have achieved already!

[shamandalie]

Mr Banana, i see great improvement! Keep on working what you do and you'll be great.

[biomanz]

Good improvement. I'd say do more anatomical sketches and shade the hell out of those - as in leave no area completely white, unless it's a hard highlight of course. That should give a better grasp on form.

[chaosrocks]

ther has been big improvements, The conquistador is pretty nice
in you sketches and studies you might want to get away from the hard edged out line that everything seems to have and start thinking a bit more about Mass and form rather than outline.

[iambanana]

Effhh... Here's a little something. Got inspired by the movie rocknrolla. Not feeling like I'm at the top of my game nowadays, neither art-wise or life-wise. Been real busy lately with doing some storyboards for this IT-company. Been sketching alot with my pencil though, I'll see if I can't upload it soon. Thanks for all the comments, I'm taking them all into consideration.

[iambanana]

Here are some scans from my sketchbook. Please leave crits:)

[iambanana]

30 minute quickie. Thoughts?

[anticasper]

cool! movie rocknrolla is a amazing film! respect for this art man=)
very good sb! ^_^

[Helioth]

holy crap, it's true!

[iambanana]

anticasper: thanks dude, appreciate it!
helioth: it is isnt it? thanks

Just a quick value study for today.

[iambanana]

Thought I should post this.
This was my birthday present for my girlfriend (Now my ex, but not because of the picture). Painted it in photoshop and then got it printed on a 120 cm x 50 cm canvas. She was very happy with it.

[iambanana]

Thought I should post these informational storyboards that I've done for an IT company called never.no. I left the text boxes open on the first one so that they could enter text themselves. The second one got pretty rough due to a very short deadline. They want me to come work at their offices next week! Woop-dee-doo!

The third one is an unfinished one I'm currently working on.

Crits?

[Grandmassa Mr. Spect]

haha the rock'n rolla is great i think the gun in is left had is a bit small an i really dig the lighting you got in alot of these goof show

[vayne108]

Holy shit you have gotten better since your first, post I looked on your first page and when I want to the last it was like night and day. Keep on improving!!!

[Leo Ki]

The storyboard has gotten better compared to the december version. However the questions I asked then remain unanswered and I can't do very useful criticism.
The other two are clean story-wise and rather dynamic even if the drawing could be smoother. How much freedom do you have in making them?

[iambanana]

Thanks for the replies, peeps!
Leo Ki: I'd like to answer your questions, but the problem with this storyboard is that it's so damn technical that I hardly understand any of it myself. Plus I haven't seen the text version so it's kinda hard for me to explain what's what, especially with english not being my native tongue.
The artistic freedom I'm given varies with each new project. I have alot of freedom making the first draft, but then me and the client really start narrowing it down. We both come with suggestions and roll with what works best.
By the way, I just found out that the PDF brochure that they put my first storyboard in was mentioned in an online magazine. "One of the most innovative PDF brochures we've ever seen!". Woop-dee-doo!

[iambanana]

Here's another finished cartoon. Wow, these things take alot of my time. Hardly have a minute to spare for personal stuff. Mostly just pencil sketches.

Any crits?

[madster]

Niiiiice!
Clean, clear, concise.

Good job.

~M

[zombifried]

Iambanana,
I think the overall look and concept of what you have here is pretty solid. On the technical side, the first thing that comes to my attention, is the lettering. I would suggest that you use a font, instead of hand-lettering. Most comics nowadays use digital fonts, instead of hand-drawn letters. This will give it a more uniform look. Here (http://www.blambot.com/fonts.shtml) is a decent site with free comic style fonts. Also the line work could be stronger. The lines are a little "hairy" and should be more confident and strong.I can suggest this book as a reference: The DC Comics Guide to Inking Comics, but nothing beats practice. Whether the lines were made digitally, or traditionally, the practice pays off. Also looking at some examples of strong ink work (again whether or not you work in a traditional, or electronic format) will not only inspire, but the observation will help to. Yeah I would devote some time to just making thumbnails of different lines all strengths, and qualities in your actual sketchpad.
Make them with pencil, and make them with pen, and or brush. You could also try doing a contour, or line drawing of observed objects (anything)...No shading, just line. indicate where the shadows are in outline form only. The whole thing should look like a coloring book page (without the crayons of course) when you are finished.Really practice varying that line strength through pencil/pen pressure. If you draw from your wrist, try taking some scrap paper and just make some wide loose circular shapes. Really let your elbow and shoulder do more of the work. This may loosen your muscles, and really let your lines become more fluid and dynamic.
On the computer side, if your working in a program like Photoshop, here (http://www.melissaclifton.com/tutorial-comicbook.html) is a great tutorial for using the pen tool to create some great lines. It's more about creating line art from photos, but there is a lot of useful info on the pen tool and line-work. Anyways these are just suggestions based upon my opinions of what I'm seeing. I know you are pressed for time with deadlines on these projects, and you probably feel like there was a lot more you wanted to do with them ...I know that feeling all too well.

I hope this helps you out, Iambanana, and keep up the good work!
Good luck,

Zombifried

[iambanana]

Thank you for your kind comments, and thank you zombifried for giving so many useful tips.
I'll definetely try to make the lines on the next one a bit more presise, using your advise. The lettering is, however, temporary. The client is entering text themself. The version I'm sending them just has blank text boxes.

[iambanana]

Did a DSG I'm pretty pleased with. It's based on a sketchup model.

I guess they're some sort of real-world bob-ombs. Unmanned heavy explosives on legs.

[Hamsta]

Hmm... I think your first priority is to more work on anatomy.
The Loomis work is a good start, you have to deconstruct what you see into shapes and planes, to get that we are looking at something with mass, otherwise things look cartoony.

Think about really seeing what's there and filling in as little as possible from what you think things look like, but when you work for a client, don't change your style in the middle of an assignment ;)

Thanks for dropping by in my sketch book :)

[HerrleerzeichenS]

great progress!

[strings]

great to see so much improvement with every updates, keep it up.

[iambanana]

This isn't anything related to concept art, really. But I thought I'd show it either way. It's a CD-cover I designed for my band's demo.
I found this hilarious book from the 50s called "Birth Without Fear by Dr. Grantly Dickreed" and it's filled with bizarre exercises for expecting mothers. And no, I did not add that black spot over the womans eyes. All the women in the book were for some reason censored. Quite an odd book, that.

Oh, and it's my 19th birthday today!

[crashMMVII]

Happy birthday!

I agree with your thread title.

[staticpen]

Happy birthday, man. :) I listened to your demo and really dig it! Your singer has a lot of charisma and has a similar tone to the dude from The Replacements. You might like them. But yeah, I enjoyed the drums and arrangements and guitars and dynamics and all of that good stuff. Really solid music. Well done.
Cheers!

[iambanana]

Here's a piece that I worked around three hours on without really finishing it. I kinda like it though.

[iambanana]

Uploading some sketches. Got myself a moleskine:)

I don't have the patience to upload more than a few at a time, because of that time-consuming copyright stuff.

Some crits are much appreciated.

[iambanana]

More sketches

[Hamsta]

I'm afraid to tell you these sketches are full of anatomical errors, and are rather lacking in mass. I have seen better. Dedicate more time to finding reference for the poses and equipment and your work will benefit greatly. With enough practice you refless work will improve.

[Mat Kaminski]

Just saying 'hi' for now ;)

[iambanana]

Hamsta: Thanks for the crit
Matte_Art: Whaaa?? No hugs?

This piece originally started as a DSG, and I liked it so much I made a finished piece out of it. Tried to make it as heart-warming as possible. Did I succeed?:)

I call it 'First Contact, Revisited'

[Mat Kaminski]

Firstly, <hugs!> ;)

Secondly, I showed that to my fiancee and I couldn't STOP hearing the "Awwwwwww" LOL!!

Good job! :3

Pull a little more outta the background and you've successfully made a book cover illustration ;)

[F87]

You have definitely improved! Keep it up!

I wanna see what the next 10 pages of your sketchbook look like, you should keep doing studies EVERYDAY!

Good work man!

[Mat Kaminski]

Serious crits? Okay here goes: Render your shadows more. Try to use the contrast color when doing shadows. Shadows also closest to the body should be alot darker than they are. Remember there are alot more tones in the skin tone when light hits it. Keep rendering the background and also the little fuzzy dude can use more love :)

[iambanana]

Man, it's been long since my last post. Sorry. I've been drawing a lot, both professionally and for recreation, so my absence does not mean my drawing has been at a standstill, but I have definetely been drawing a lot less than I used to. The band has been taking up most of my time, as we are closing in on our second demo.

Anyway, I'm trying to get back in the swing of things.

Here's a little something I finished yesterday. Pretty happy with it, but there is always room for critique.

[iambanana]

Here are a few new sketches. I sketch constantly, but not all of them are good enough for me to show off. I do think I have improved alot recently, and I think I'm finally getting the hang of shading!

[NickyBeats]

hey man, thought id return the favor and check out your work! great improvement from pg 1!! your really starting to get better. im really digging your pencil work, as well as the digital stuff too. keep up the hard work!

ps. thanks for the serious crit you gave me, alot of good points!

[krel]

Nice progress here :) Keep it up, dude.

[iambanana]

Experimenting with the Reilly method. So much fun!

[iambanana]

Made my first self portrait. Still got a long way to go :/

[iambanana]

Did a speedpaint this evening. 40 mins.

[Nutella]

Are you kidding me right now? The first page of this thread made me think how frustrated I would be looking at your work, with the really weak line and color that just screamed how new to drawing you were. But after seeing your more recent stuff (from the past 2~3 pages) I'm totally blown away. Your self portrait? Fuckin' wicked man. It's great, and I can't believe it's your first.

It's good that you had someone like Hamsta for the critique. I would love to have someone just totally rip my art apart right now.

Like you said in an earlier post, you really are gettin' the hang of shading. It's some really nice shading. Every thought about creating backgrounds for your many figures?

What's this Reilly method you speak of? That drawing is beautiful, and I'd love to try something like that out.

One last thing: You say you've worked professionally. I'm at that stage where I'm interested to see if I've got what it takes to do professional work. How do you find clients?

You've really inspired me to go back to using pencil/graphite/charcoal for their diverse capabilities. For the past month I've literally ONLY used pen and marker. Gosh I love your sketchbook.

[Memo213]

Wow, you've totally improved since the first post! Your first self-portrait is epic! Might I ask what you've been studying to achieve such fantastic lighting and coloring skills?

[iambanana]

Nutella: Thanks so much for the kind words. I'm truly flattered. As for the client, it was a lucky shot on my part. You see, it's my dad's company, but they later hired me again just because they were happy with my previous work.
The reilly method is a quick sketch drawing which grants some real nice elegance. Check out these (Especially the last one):
http://conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=172081
http://conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=166868

Memo213: Thanks alot! To tell you the truth, I've learnt more from studying artists here at conceptart than any other place. I rarely find the time to do hardcore studies (Which isn't a good thing) so I just find my inspiration here instead. Also there are some great tutorials here that have taught me alot.


Thanks for stopping by!

[iambanana]

Finished two pieces today. One is more of a sketchy-type of thing where I just painted my hearts desire. The other is a request from a friend. It's from reference, and I call it "Oliver Twist - Revisited".

And here's a GIF of the progress:)

http://i216.photobucket.com/albums/cc46/fluffeluff/oliver-twist-gifr.gif

EDIT: It seems the attachment manager is being dodgy. I'll upload the images later.

[iambanana]

Here they are!

[iambanana]

Here's something a little darker than the usual. 1 hour in PS.

CRITS ANYONE?? ON ANYTHING??? This is getting lonely:(

[Mat Kaminski]

Quick one, but this newest piece you have looks very much like the Korn album in a way "Follow the Leader" ... a little darker though ;)