gangsters...need assistance

[gallon]

I need some crits here to push this to the finishline...
Sorry that the image might be a bit small, and it's probably gonna be halfcovered in commercials for a sec or two.

http://hem.passagen.se/gallon/bildsidor/gang.htm

It's inspired by the classic gangster-movies and resorvair dogs, depicting some rundown part of town with some mobster doing the classic tarantino-walk. Now I need all the help I can get to make this one better. I think all colours may be a bit too saturated. Any tips and crits appreciated!
*edit*made some minor changes, but both images are included :)
*edit* Thanx to Danilo I hope I can show u this without the link. Hope it works.
http://mywebpage.netscape.com/henrikgallon/gang3.jpg

[Danilo]

Nice for scatch, but I will start final again. You have a lot of perspective errors.
http://mywebpage.netscape.com/_fm
This is where you can upload images and link them to concept art and other. :chug:

I saw your site. You are realy good at composition, but you need mor drawing-painting practice. You remind me to some north expressionist.

[Chiba]

Hi gallon,
I quite like this piece for the feel of it. It has the right feel for a mafia style gangster film, not only because of the use of scenery and costume but also the choice of colours.
If anything I would suggest the addition of texture in the surrounding scene, or perhaps grit and scratches, to help heighten that old photograph sorta thing- then again, maybe that's been done to death.
I like your simple use of highlights and shadows as well- quite effective

Chiba

[kapturowski]

Howdy, it´s nice to see some new stuff from you. I have to agree a bit on the perspective issue, the wagon looks like it´s on its way to fall over :) I think that it looks like the horizon is n´t planar, as if the photographer didnt hold the camera straight.

Push it further, add some textures to the bg and work the characters some more.

(the gangsta on the left looks more like a cowboy to me, maybe its the flared legs on his pants ;P)