jon

[HYBRID187]

concepts for a book im working on
http://www.renderosity.com/photos/ArtistArticle5013.jpg
http://www.renderosity.com/photos/ArtistArticle5035.JPG
http://www.renderosity.com/photos/ArtistArticle5033.jpg
http://www.renderosity.com/photos/ArtistArticle5034.jpg

[I.was.ink]

I like the police lookin guy at the end, but....ummmm......they dont look finished to me. The poses are too stiff imo, the legs are too short, and if you look at the legs below the knee only, you can't tell if you're looking at the front or the back of the leg. Another thing, is the wrinkles of the clothes around the crotch, knees, and just overall look to bulky. The guys look like there...uhumm...crotch is being tortured to death, but they dont seem to know this...

Didnt mean to be harsh, just points I thought you needed to know. :)

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[Muttonhead]

The space ship is very well-rendered, but the perspective is incorrect. You need to establish a vanishing point so that it doesn't look like it gets bigger as it goes back into space.

Nice renderings though. I agree that the poses are stiff, I like to work with a non-photot blue pencil and work real loose, using my whole arm when I draw, and then tighten up as the details begin to work themselves out.

-Muttonhead

[HYBRID187]

ha ha i laughed out loud at the optimus call well said

short legs really? ill look at that more then
the dark backround well that kinda doesnt matter theyre just templates for the sequential hence the statue poses
thanx for your input

[Nucleardan]

i know this may seem odd to say but in the first panel of characters, the last one on the left made me laugh. Just the thought of being so many years in advance to our own culture (having space ships and androids), and the big stupid looking one is still carrying around a club. :)

[Atmospheria]

Very nice Toys....

[nardfrog]

PUt some action into those guys! THe look too stiff. The space ship's perspective lines are divergant too. The ship looks to be getting bigger towards the back. If thats what you wanted, you should making it more clear because its too inbetween right now.

[HYBRID187]

Originally posted by Nucleardan
i know this may seem odd to say but in the first panel of characters, the last one on the left made me laugh. Just the thought of being so many years in advance to our own culture (having space ships and androids), and the big stupid looking one is still carrying around a club. :)

all will be revieled in the story these guys are thugs in the poor and dangerous sector of the city hence the bat thanx for your reply

atmosphere;like your mothers?

nardfrog yeah i know they are very static but i just wanted them as templates dont worry ill throw some dynamics at ya soon promise and yes i messed the perspective up big time but perservered anyway juat to get something to work from thanx for your reply