Pirates (need help!)

[Isric]

Hey guys. I'm drawing some pirates. I'm kind of getting frustrated with this now so I figured I'd put it up and see if anything can be done.

The biggest frustration is Mr. I've-been-shot on the right (drawing wierd poses from scratch rarely works out right away). You can see that from the first stage to the second I had to move his legs (from the hip) over to the left because he was getting too stretchy. But now, it feels like there's something wrong with his head.

There's other stuff too, so if you can see it, point it out. I'd like to have this worked out pretty well before it's too finished.

(little unimportant side note: I think this is the first WIP i've ever posted)

http://rhodes.design-culture.net/images/process.jpg

[platypusStar]

Very nice composition, great angle. The "secnd stage" of the work is nice, and could work by itself as well (in my opinion).

The hand on the ground looks great. I'm not too sure why you're frustrated. It looks great to me.

[tyboogie]

hey isric--nice piece so far

i thuink if you pushed the scale diff a bit more it might add dimension and make the piece more dynamic

if your having trouble with the pose why not abuse a friend and put them in that pose and take a snapshot or sketch em in that pose then and there. his pose looks pretty good, but its hard to judge what could make it more believable without reference

[zeroe]

mmm this is great.
perhaps add a bit more contrast to the colors? i think that would make it more dynamic. you could also try to blue the background a bit, motion blur, to help the perspective

[Isric]

thanks for the feeback guys. I've been working on it a couple hours every night. this is it so far.

I'm probably about %60 done.

http://rhodes.design-culture.net/images/stage5copy.jpg

[davi]

i would make the lighting a little bit darker on the figure to the right of the drawing since he so close to the viewer. the colors are looking alittle diluted and washed

[Grooveholmes]

Sword perfectly clean?

<Edit>

Oh, nm.. he got shot not stabbed...

[Spacey]

This is looking really cool so far.

I know you arn't done yet, but the red guy's hand holding the sword at the moment looks as if it were facing the wrong way. We should be able to see his fingers...unless you were going to do that before you finished.

[Blind]

Lookin' great so far, Isric. I love the shot guy's expression along ith the stressed fingers scrping the ground. He really looks like he's not having a good time >8)

Just out of curiosity, what size are you working in with this? Are we seeing the full size?

[Juice5942]

Originally posted by Grooveholmes
Sword perfectly clean?

<Edit>

Oh, nm.. he got shot not stabbed...



In reference to this, how about a little smoke coming from the gun so people know exactly what happened? Then again, you're not totally done yet, so maybe you planned to.

I do like the image though, go pirates. :chug:

[Halis_Aetrous]

Arr! It be a good drawin fer cert'n matey.

[WildSpruceMoose]

Yeah I think some nicely rendered smoke from the gun, would really be good. The blood and shot wound are really well done.

[Atmospheria]

very good isric...i'm waiting for the finished one!

[Milho]

Very niiice!

My crits:
The wounded guy's biceps looks very strange/thin.
More contrast on the shoes/trousers
The ground inbetween his legs (the hole under his butt) looks a bit too bright IMO

What will I do until you post the finished one...hm I know :beer: