5 lettered pages

[Grendel]

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/let1.jpg

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/let3.jpg

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/let2.jpg

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/let4.jpg

http://igrendel.com/images/sequentials/let5.jpg

pencils-me
digi paints- underbloom
concept/story- ty gorton

[leo_cesar]

If you want my sincere opinion, I recommend you to erase the letters "FWOOM!" on the second frame and "HEEEELP!" in the window attack. It doesn’t match the stile of the piece and it sounds like amateur.
Hope it heeeelps!

[MindCandyMan]

Yeah I agree 100%...the fwoom and the heeelp really take away from everything else. You don't need those either...they only reiterate what the image already says. Everything else looks great though...but definitely take those two out.

[Grendel]

I defnitel agree on those points, and I hope they do get adjusted or removed all together.

[gallon]

Great stuff! Really like the rendering. You come far since the scetches, really interesting. Keep us updated :)

[bwkeough]

I'm really glad you've kept us updated with this project and I like it alot. The text confirms the story I was imagining. Is this story going to tie-in with the Ronin pics we saw a few weeks ago?

Visually, the work you and underbloom do is excellent. But I'm going to nit pick some of the words. Just opinions follow:

I guess you've already changed te "heeelp" and "fwoom" that were previously mentioned? I'd even remove entirely the "help" I see in the window scene, I think a wordless open mouth would be a more likely reaction.

I get the Jonah and the Whale reference in the guy's name and I'm interested to see if the whale that's swallowed the kid becomes a monster. ...but "Jonah Krain" ? Just my opinion, nothing more, but I don't like it. "Jonah Ahab" or "Jonah Ishmael" would sound goofy, too, but there's a twisted whale reference there. Is there a reference in Krain that I'm missing?

I look forward to seeing more work from you guys!

[WildSpruceMoose]

My god. How dynamic, how intriging, how interesting. I've always loved your style. Something that I find very good too is the words fit the exact ideas I had when looking at the original pencils you posted. They fit, and ofcourse the colours are very well done. This is really great work ;)

[alti]

awsome tecnique, very styalised, very unique and fluidic, if that makes scence.