comic book

[TheDirtSyndicate]

these are the first 4 pages of my comicbook.

page 1
http://nowgocreate.com/3/showcase.php?t=1185&nolaunch=1

page 2
http://nowgocreate.com/3/showcase.php?t=1184&nolaunch=1

page 3
http://nowgocreate.com/3/showcase.php?t=1183&nolaunch=1

page 4
http://nowgocreate.com/3/showcase.php?t=1182&nolaunch=1

after this, a car chase insues ending in the good guy realizing that the bad guy cut his brake lines, so he crashes. during the crash he bumps his head and starts halucinating himself as a ferret and the other guy as a crow.
in the end.....well....thats a secret.

[endregan]

nice comic. lots of character

use [ img ] [ /img ]

without the spaces


p.s. nice site btw.

[TheDirtSyndicate]

thanks endregan.
i appreciate it.

but the didn't work.

[NaTe J]

Looks really cool. Wish i could read the writing on page two though.

[Milho]

Very stylish! Love it sofar.

What bugs me is the "camera" i some cases. Not the perspective itself but how the single cells relate to each other.
I mean:
Page 1: You get a fullshot of the two guys and then a extreme close up of the guys face from the same angle.
This is pretty ok in movies, like zooming in and showing the guys reaction. But in this comic it looks pretty boring. I mean you can see the face in the first picture as well and eventhough you have a better idea of his reaction you get barely new information.
As a reader I would just fly by the second pic (except you'll add text to it). I'm not sure. I mean on the one hand you have to struggle with the visual connection of the pics on the other you have to give some new elements.

Concluding I just would slightly change the perspective of the close up. It's just looks identical to the fullshot.

Of course this is only my oppinion. Maybe it helps you :) Besides I really enjoy your work, great skills and style.
. Can't wait to see more.

[behemot5]

good good good good good good good

[TheDirtSyndicate]

thanks for the comments guys.
i truly appreciate it.

this is my first comicbook and i'm having fun, and im glad that other's like it.

[ClocktowerArtworks]

my constructive criticism is that you don't have a lot happening on each page. If you are considering self-publishing this work you will save a lot of money and time by condensing your pages...all four of those pages could be made into one. More importantly, this will also help the flow of the book. try working smaller first, with thumbnails, to layout your pages until you arrive at one you like. that's all i got. i want to study them more later.

[TheDirtSyndicate]

sorry it took so long to reply, my computers got a virus so i have to use the computer at work.

anyway,
thanks for the comments, and i assure the next 3 pages are rockin'. i've taken what you've said to heart Clocktower, and made them pretty crazy. it involves a small shootout inside a bus.

i'll post as soon as my computer's fixed.



i got inspiration from the work that jim lee's currently doing on Batman. if you haven't seen it, check it out. i've never been a batman fan until now. jim lee rocks.

[ClocktowerArtworks]

something else to consider when designing your pages is to try to tell the story without words. by this i mean, make it so that your pages can be "read" from cover to cover and easily understood without lettering. this is one of the most difficult aspects of storytelling and comic book pencilling. I've found it useful to watch a really well directed movie with the sound muted. If you can easily tell whats happening without hearing any words, music, or sound effects, then you've got a really well crafted book. you may have heard this a million times before, but it's really important, so i thought it merited repeating.